During their journey, Bugs and Laffy ran into their old friend Elmer Fudd.
"Where are you fellers headed?" asked Elmer.
"We're headed to the other side of the forrest in exploration of the beyond," replied Bugs.
"Would you happen to have some room for me, too," asked Elmer.
Bugs and Laffy agreed to have him and continued their way to the other side of their forrest. As they made their way through the forrest, they also picked up a cat, a crow, an egg, and a millstone. The carriage being pulled became awfully heavy with everyone in it. But the mice decided that they would keep on with the journey in order to make it to the other side of the forrest.
After some miles, the mice grew extremely weak and needed to rest for the night.
"Just up here is Herr Korbes home, we came rest there," said Bugs.
When they reached the house, Herr Korbes was not home. So each of them found their own resting place within Herr Korbes home. The cat rested in the warm ashes of the fireplace. The grow perched above the kitchen cabinets. Bug fluffed his tail and curled up on the doormat. Laffy found a large bucket of water to crawl into to rest. The egg rolled her way around until she found a towel on the floor, where she rolled herself up to stay warm. And finally, the millstone laid down above the door and Bugs. They each fell asleep peacefully and soundly.
The next morning, Herr Korbes came bursting through the door. Bug yelled as Herr stepped on his tail, which caused the millstone to slam down on his foot. In a fit of pain, he ran to the cabinets to fetch his splint. The crow was started by the slamming of the cabinets and began to fly around the house cawing and clawing at Herr. infuriated, he ran to the living room and reached for the the pitchfork by the fireplace. Startled, the cat hissed and threw ashes into Herr's face. Blinded by the ashes, Herr ran to bathroom and grabbed a towel to wipe his face. The egg rolled out, cracked, and glued Herr's eyes shut. As he ran to the pantry to fetch the pale of water, Laffy jumped, honked his nose, and bit down on Herr's nose. Without a care to give at this point, Herr grabbed the bucket and dumped it onto his face. He released a loud yell as the water hit his face and everyone ran out of the house and all in different directions.
It was a hard day for Herr Korbes.
Author's Note:
I stayed true to the original story, but changed some of the characters within it. I picked Bugs and Laffy because they are more modern characters from Loony Tunes, which would help connect readers to their personality types and spark their interest into the story. I kept the egg, the cat, and the millstone from the original story and their role in the house. There was a duck in the story, so i just named his Laffy to add more of a tie in for readers an then I changed one of the characters from a pin to Bugs Bunny, because he is the counterbalance to Laffy.
Your story is short, sweet, and enjoyable. I really liked how you incorporated Loony Tunes characters into it; it definitely made it more relatable and fun to read. I'm surprised Elmer Fudd didn't try to hunt any wabbits, though! The only thing I noticed in your story was that in the first line, the name "Bugs" isn't capitalized. Other than that, your story was great. Good job.
ReplyDeletePoor Herr Korbes! I like how you took elements of the original tale and added in modern day characters. You write nicely and it was a fun read. I have one, kind of nitpicky things to mention: isn’t it Daffy Duck (not Laffy)? Not that it particularly matters haha. I like that the egg and the millstone were both characters that you kept in. They make it more fantastical and silly.
ReplyDeleteI like that you used more familiar characters for your story but I think you meant to write Daffy Duck, not Laffy. Unless you wanted to change the name slightly but you didn't change the names of the other characters. I would also have enjoyed if you lengthened and added more detail to the beginning half of the story. I thought that it had a lot of potential for more detail to really connect the reader to the story.
ReplyDeleteHey Austin,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your story man, it was a good enjoyable read. I really enjoyed how you incorporated Looney Tunes character into your story, it made it fun to read. And I liked how you brought to light their personalities throughout the story. The only complaint I have is in the authors note to talk about the original story so that we can understand what you changed. But other than that I really enjoyed it, keep up the good work!
I really got a kick out of reading your story. It made me smile and laugh, which in a story is something you always wanted. I never read the original so I had no idea that you kept most the story and just changed the names of the characters. I think modernizing it to a very familiar cartoon makes it enjoyable and memorable. Wonderful job!
ReplyDeleteAustin, the title of your story immediately brought back nostalgia. I remember when I was like three years old there was this bugs bunny picture frame in my room with a photo of me as a baby.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed this story very much, especially bugs’s quote, “We're headed to the other side of the forrest in exploration of the beyond.” I think all of us are in exploration of the beyond. I think it’s good that as human beings (or in your story’s case, animals) all have this innate desire to get out of our comfort zone.
Incredible job, I enjoy your writing. Looking forward to reading more of your stories in the future.
This is excellent; I love that you used cartoon characters in this story! They added a level of humor, and your writing style really made it easy to read. I felt like I could really see the cartoon in my head, with Bugs and Daffy running around. And I especially loved the last line! "It was a hard day for Herr Korbes," that was such a good way to end it.
ReplyDeleteHey Austin,
ReplyDeleteYour story was really fun to read. I like how you added Loony Tune characters as well! I wasn’t a big Loony Tunes fan but when my brother was younger he was, so I am really familiar with the characters. I’m glad you stuck with the original story because I bet it would have been challenging to change it up. It was definitely a hard day for Herr Korbes!! Overall, thanks for the fun read!