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Here begins the story of the phoenix, Fier.
Now you must know Fier. Fier is a phoenix who flies the skies across the earth in search of dragons. He is a mighty large phoenix with flaming wings that combust with heat upon each flap, claws as sharp of razor blades and a beak so strong it could crush diamonds.
One day, he flew by a lounging dragon who has just finished his meal of 2 sheep.
“Caw! Hello there dragon! What have we here?” said Fier.
The dragon looked up as Fier flapped his combusting wings in circles around him.
“It would be a meal for two, but unfortunately it became a meal for one.”
Fier encroached upon the dragon with a large gust of fiery winds. The dragon didn’t so much as bat and eye.
“Who said that this meal was over?” said Fier with a crooked smile.
The Dragon looked around.
“What else would you suggest eating here?” said the dragon.
Stumped, Fier raised and expanded his wings into the air releasing a wave of heat.
“Are you not afraid, dragon?” said Fier with a voice of might.
“What is there to be afraid of, phoenix? I have seen a phoenix bigger flying the skies just the day before and I will most likely see one bigger the day after,” said the dragon as he rolled onto his belly.
The phoenix flapped his wings hard and hard until he was 4 times as large as the dragon.
“What about now, dragon? Do you feel the flames of fear inside you roll and grow?” said the dragon with a shortness of breath.
The dragon licked his claws clean from the blood of his sheep to demonstrate the lack of concern of the phoenix. The phoenix raged as fire left his beak. He tucked his wings and head into his belly to meet his feet. Combusting with anger he reached his wings high into the sky. Fire swirling and stretching around as he whipped around his tail. The dragon looked around. The phoenix flapped his mighty wings against the ground with a gust of wind as strong as the Western Winds. The dragon grappled onto the rocks nearby as the phoenix flipped upside down and carried upwards into the sky. The flames wisped into the winds and extinguished themselves. The fires of Fier had been quenched ashes fell like snow onto the earth. Out from underneath the small boulders and dust the dragon crawled. A fiery chuckle left the dragons mouth as he approached this small mound of chirping ash.
A quick blow from the nostrils blew the ashes away from a small phoenix.
With a quick stomp of the dragons foot the phoenix was smothered.
•A conceited self may lead to self-destruction•
Authors Note:
The story I have shared is original work in itself, but the idea and notation at the end comes from a fable called The Frog and the Ox, which is about a young frog and an old frog. The young frog asks the old frog about this creature he has seen, which is the farmer's white ox. The old frog tells him about it and puffs himself up larger and larger until he thinks he as big as the ox. But the old father frog puffed himself up so big that he bust trying to prove that he could be as big as the ox.
Bibliography:
"The Frog and the Ox" from The Fables of Aesop by Joseph Jacobs.
https://archive.org/details/fablesaeso00aesouoft
"Now you must know Fier. Fier is a phoenix who flies the skies across the earth in search of dragons. He is a mighty large phoenix with flaming wings that combust with heat upon each flap, claws as sharp of razor blades and a beak so strong it could crush diamonds."
ReplyDeleteWow! I really loved the imagery that you created for Fier. I can really picture the beast in all it's glory. I love that the wings 'combust'- this really gives the phoenix a cool level of mystery and awe. The image that you used in this story is also very fitting for the story and adds a nice element.
I wonder if the dragon had come into contact with a phoenix before, and therefore knew what to expect with him. Maybe this is why he seemed so aloof when the phoenix started to size him up. Maybe Phoenixes are known to be conceited and typically end up being their own demise.
Very nice story overall! I really appreciated that you transformed this story and made it your own. Im excited to read more from you throughout the semester!
Austin, I was able to clearly see the source story come through before I even got to your author's note. Therefore, bravo on that! I was really impressed on how you were take a fairly short Aesop's fable and extrapolate it how to a similar story but with greater detail and fun new characters. I wrote my story this week as well from a fable and was finding it tough to spur the imagination for more details. Another thing I wonder that you could have done with this story would be to keep the original characters but switch the ending in some unexpected twist. However, that would ultimately change the whole moral of the story, but would be very interesting. All in all, I really like the way you have rewritten the story and the clarity which you wrote it. The dialogue was great and I liked the way you created new paragraphs for each. This is an element which I want to try to include on one of my future stories. Thanks for sharing and I look forward to reading more of your posts.
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